Hiding places
Between the mirror,
where the dark leaves its coat,
shelter from your rain.
Sun brushed butterfly
cloaked by my chrysanthemum
whispers with the breeze.
Stars, shaped like kisses,
peek between cardigan clouds
to glimpse their ocean.
Who stole the daisies
from beyond cow shed corner?
Your secret is safe.
from a lovely prompt by chevrefeuille
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johnnycrabcakes said,
September 13, 2014 at 9:53 pm
Love the non-specificity of this. The “un-pin-down-ability.” It plays beautifully on the cusp of meaning. What my friend Jeremy Nathan Marks would call “boundary work.”
Nice work.
Are you familiar with haiku sonnets? You’ve very nearly fit the form here.
http://aprayerlikegravity.wordpress.com/forms/haiku-sonnet/
…if you are curious.
David Marshal invented the form. I’ve written a few. I have a couple in the works right now, as it happens. I have found it to be a form that fits many of my thoughts very well.
Take care–
jcc
Julia Dean-Richards said,
September 13, 2014 at 10:07 pm
Thank you Jcc – I like places in between, always did. I will seek out and read …
amac said,
September 14, 2014 at 12:06 am
I love your free flowing un pin down ability as JCC put it. I love that you just go with it and it really works. Cardigan clouds..love the image.
amac said,
September 14, 2014 at 12:06 am
Apparently. I can’t say anything but love right now. Loss for words I guess
Julia Dean-Richards said,
September 14, 2014 at 8:37 am
I love that you love – never too much love – thank you.
Chèvrefeuille said,
September 14, 2014 at 12:17 am
Wow Julia you have created a wonderful ‘full circle’ haiku series here. Really a beauty. Thank you for visiting my weblog … feel free to visit again … be welcome. I am your host at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.
Julia Dean-Richards said,
September 14, 2014 at 8:39 am
Welcome, and thank you. I will certainly be back to sit a while with you.
Chèvrefeuille said,
September 14, 2014 at 6:52 pm
Love to see you again at Carpe Diem
julespaige said,
September 14, 2014 at 12:19 am
A delightful series. Each one is as soft as a birds feather floating and too as strong as the feathers that remain.
Really like the ‘cardigan clouds’ – they are sort of sweaters or jumpers for the sky.
Julia Dean-Richards said,
September 14, 2014 at 8:43 am
Thank you, Jules. I am a lover of cardigans – they are safe and warm.
moondustwriter said,
September 14, 2014 at 1:05 am
yes your images are so vivid and captivating. I really like the unpinned down effect
Julia Dean-Richards said,
September 14, 2014 at 8:49 am
Thank you, moondustwriter. Unpinned, yes – we can not be held for long.
janicead said,
September 14, 2014 at 3:16 am
They each has a nice twist. Really appreciate the last one’s construction.
Julia Dean-Richards said,
September 14, 2014 at 8:52 am
Welcome, Janicead, and thank you.
Blog It Or Lose It said,
September 14, 2014 at 3:18 am
such a completely different angle for this prompt — I really enjoyed this series. The cardigan clouds are especially wonderful – and pulling it all together with a theme of “hiding places” is a wonderful touch —
Julia Dean-Richards said,
September 14, 2014 at 9:12 am
Thank you, Bioli, it was a pleasure to write, and wrapped my hidden feelings in something warm.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said,
September 14, 2014 at 6:12 pm
Stars shaped like kisses… Iove that..
Bastet said,
September 15, 2014 at 10:55 am
Interesting romantic take with this full circle … love!
Julia Dean-Richards said,
September 16, 2014 at 3:43 am
Thank you, Bastet. It was fun to write.
Bastet said,
September 16, 2014 at 4:13 am
🙂 as it always should be … bravo!