Senescence licks a disturbed light
onto his bedroom wall.
Sleep pitted by dark dreams
my pilgrim rises in good faith,
the pendulum of remembrance
striking a steady rhythm.
Octogenerian legs undone at night;
challenged by verticality
he leans heavy on the door
flexing old shoulders,
turning his head, slow, like this,
already unsure of his purpose.
Taking heart though (detected by his step)
he descends stairs unsupported,
collects his coat and keys,
and as simply as he can,
will have no more of this…
“I will have no more of this,” he says.
An acknowledgement of my message would have been polite.
Ah, KB, as you will see below your message on my post, I did indeed acknowledge your very interesting message. Perhaps you did not receive the notification? If not, I apologise. As a result of your message, I wrote today’s poem, which sprang from some of the words used in the last poem. I agree with your observations in some respects, but the longer poem presents me with a challenge as a writer and I enjoyed pursuing it. All your comments are appreciated, so thank you most kindly x
~really like this! very good~
Thank you Cindy. There is a group of poems (oh, I think I mean ‘anthology’, don’t I?), some written, some not written yet, which refer in some part to my dad. Two of my favourites are ‘Ladder Man’ and ‘Time Piece’ x
Well…it’s only taken me about 9 years to get back to this dropped ball, this broken promise….like I just stepped out to grab a pack of smokes and then……disappeared…..for 9 years….
My apologies my dear.
This rings so true and so honest. A prime example of “showing, not telling”. Very simply stated, very powerful impact.
I hope that you are well and that your are still creating. I am trying to make my way back to my most creative space.
To that end, I would like to invite you to join me in a small private group that Holly Lofgreen and I have just created. A safe, community space for like-minded and deep poets.
If this sounds interesting to you, we’d love to have you with us.
Do you have a preferred email that I can send an invite to?